1. SLLhotD's Avatar
    Wassup everyone,
    I just started making music... i'm pretty excited
    u guys should check it out
    myspace.com/dncsmurf
    I appreciate criticism
    but please don't be assholes for no reason
    and btw i rap, so if you don't like rap, don't look cuz your just gonna dis me cuz u like what u like and it isnt rap.

    thnx :P
    if u do like it, plz tell people about it so i can get around

    thnx
    2009-09-24 11:02 PM
  2. one1's Avatar
    Rap too slow, no flow. speed it up and get in tune.
    2009-09-24 11:13 PM
  3. SLLhotD's Avatar
    aytt thnks - but my lyrics r ayt rite?
    SMURF
    YO i started rappin
    check it, and spread tha word
    myspace.com/dncsmurf
    2009-09-24 11:16 PM
  4. Grassmasta's Avatar
    Your not doing bad. Invest in a better mic (with a shock mount), and if you don't have pro-tools get it. Your vocals are clipping. Get a pop-filter too. I've been at music for 15 years and I've only recently started making beats with Reason 4 and Ableton Live. I would say this though, there needs to be more to your beat. Listen to Prodigy - Smack My ***** Up (I know its not hip-hop, but its how you should be using Reason), listen to Lupe Fiasco (I don't know if he makes his own beats, but who ever does is really amazing), and of course Kanye West (hes a ******, but he can make a solid beat). Keep at it. Stay inspired!
    Last edited by Grassmasta; 2009-09-25 at 02:29 AM.
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    2009-09-25 02:27 AM
  5. bteamer's Avatar
    Better mic and faster words. But the beats were alright.
    LOL! DOesnt everyone know that only real women know how to handle a stick?
    As long as Miguel can blow...he's straight.
    I dread that first dusting of the white stuff.
    ready for a romp buddy? ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
    2009-09-26 08:07 PM
  6. soulthoughts's Avatar
    Work on your vocabulary and rhyme schemes. Write like mad. It's a good start though.
    2009-09-27 09:32 AM
  7. SLLhotD's Avatar
    Hey guys,
    I havn't been on here for a while, but some time ago, I think almost a year ago I put up a thread on some other forums with my link on it. I have made many more songs since then and uploaded some on myspace. I still have a lot more but I'm not going to upload them till I perform them at school :P.
    Anyway can you guys please check out what I have up so far and give constructive critisism, please don't hate without telling me how to improve, keep in mind that I am just 14 years old and I don't have a manager or a producer, the lyrics are all mine and I find the instrumentals on the internet. Btw this is hip hop and rap music so if its not your kind of music don't hate.

    My Link

    Lonely Valentine - Hook by someone on soundclick but the verses are me
    July 12 '95 - All me
    Climbin to tha top - Hook by me, first verse by me, second by a friend, third by another friend
    Politically Incorrect - All me
    Scream - All me
    Lucifer - First verse by me, second by friend, third by another friend
    How I spit (old song) - All me
    Made to be (old song) - All me
    Just press play (old old oldddd song) - Hook by me, first verse by me, second by a friend

    Thanks
    SMURF
    YO i started rappin
    check it, and spread tha word
    myspace.com/dncsmurf
    2010-03-04 11:45 PM
  8. battlecrushr's Avatar
    R U FROM nigeria
    2010-03-05 12:03 AM
  9. SLLhotD's Avatar
    yeah i'm indian but i've been brought up in nigeria...
    what do you think about my music
    any advice?
    SMURF
    YO i started rappin
    check it, and spread tha word
    myspace.com/dncsmurf
    2010-03-05 12:32 AM
  10. battlecrushr's Avatar
    pretty good
    i was born there and lived there for some time
    2010-03-05 12:34 AM
  11. SLLhotD's Avatar
    oh cool cool lagos?
    SMURF
    YO i started rappin
    check it, and spread tha word
    myspace.com/dncsmurf
    2010-03-05 10:39 PM
  12. battlecrushr's Avatar
    born in katsina but lived in lagos
    2010-03-05 11:31 PM
  13. SiFO's Avatar
    [ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nw1yaIPPAeI]YouTube - Bangs- Let me take you to the movies[/ame]

    your boy Bangs!
    "If You're Not First, You're Last" - Ricky Bobby

    2010-03-10 04:52 AM
  14. SLLhotD's Avatar
    haha lol
    what did you think about my songs?
    SMURF
    YO i started rappin
    check it, and spread tha word
    myspace.com/dncsmurf
    2010-03-15 11:44 PM
  15. z3r01's Avatar
    sounds ok but u have to learn timing, ur off bars because the beats arent to the same tempo as those that u write it...here are some examples of my productions and music:

    heres a rock song i worked on im the last verse and chorus:

    critical danger 1.mp3

    feelthelerix

    song im on :

    Move you (chorus only)

    thirstyMcGurk myspace

    songs im on are :
    on top (second verse)
    flip that(chorus only)

    plus some more on my pages :

    myspace.com/binaryinfections

    myspace.com/dabloq
    Last edited by z3r01; 2010-03-16 at 12:18 AM.
    2010-03-16 12:06 AM
  16. Zeal's Avatar
    no
    EDM
    2010-03-16 01:38 AM
  17. SiFO's Avatar
    no
    win!
    "If You're Not First, You're Last" - Ricky Bobby

    2010-03-17 03:04 AM
  18. 1PM@N!O's Avatar
    pretty good start, but something just doesn't work for me. I'm not sure what it is, but i'm thinkin its either your voice or mic that make it sound not so good. And if you could add a little more speed and some more beats, that would help.

    Overall pretty good job so far. good luck.
    2010-03-25 06:45 AM
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